Making a strong Narrative

Ola readers,

We are going to show you what we have been doing in the week and the tram 2 I am going to tell you.
Strong Narrative.Today we changed a sick sentences and the sentences to be narrative. here is my boring sentences. Anna sat down on the cold ground. She was looking at the evil mirror.

this is my story that I'm working on I have not finished it. this is my story

This is the picture we used and this is the start of my story.

She had found it lying alone, deserted, abandoned in the attic. After making the discovery, Anna had gazed and marvelled at it for some time. Where had it come from? Why had no dust settled upon it, as it had done over everything else that resided in her attic? A layer of the thick dust blanketed the attic floor, and as the sunlight glared through the attic windows, the dust particles yet to settle were illuminated as they hovered in the stuffy air. Yet, the mirror looked flawless, untouched by age, not a finger print in sight.

Anna propped the mirror up against one of the thick, timber beams that jutted from the attic floor. Settling down into a comfortable position, she tentatively placed a finger against the glass. 

She want in the mirror. She was in a dimension exactly like her home. BUT the galss and the thing around it Broek. She what's not happy with the mirror. S0 she went down the steers her mum and dad were not there. She was like WHAT. hohohohohohohohohoho. My dog is not here. So she went outside to see if anyone was out there BUT know one was out there oley the dog.

Thank you for looking at my story and reading my story was it cool.
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